Here's the place for budding writers to receive judgments and constructive criticism.
Guidelines
Authors: Post your fiction or non-fiction that will take up to 10 minutes to read. Whatever you want. ONLY POST YOUR OWN WORK.
Reviewers: Read the story as if it were a creation just to entertain you. If you don't know how to be constructive just tell the author what you thought was missing (boring plot, flat characters, whatever).
Wow, this thread leaves me dumbfounded. Do >>11, >>13, >>14 feel their doing is affected by stories? Do they get a different haircut, change the way you talk, stop driving a car, quit their job, become a hermit in suriname because of a story? And does >>13 read novels not for entertainment?