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2 Name: Bookworm : 2005-12-08 16:57 ID:VAZeaEzT

In french class, we had to write a little story based off a poem by Prévert, "Le Cancre." What is the dunce's name? What is the name of the schoolmaster? Why is he a dunce and what was the teacher's reaction to his sudden action? These are the questions asked in the assignment, and this is the story that answers them.
The poem is here: http://membres.lycos.fr/artistiqueweb/poeme22.htm
The english translation is here: http://www.artofeurope.com/prevert/pre6.htm
Here is my story, with translation below:

Le nom du cancre était Jacque et c'était le nom du maître aussi. Le cancre avait seulement une moitié d'un cerveau, la moitié droite. Pour cette raison il ne pouvait ni parler ni écrire, mais à la place il communiquait par le dessin.

Un Jour, il devenait irrité avec la tyrannie du monde du cerveau gauche. Son état ne l'avait jamais empêché de l'action symbolique. Il a effacé tout les écritures du professeur comme protestes. Pour les remplacer, il a dessiné le symbol du cerveau droit, un griffonnage uninterpretable du bonheur.

Mais, sans savoir, cet acte a incité les autres étudiants à la violence. On ecoutait leurs cris : ‹‹ L'école est une prison ! ›› Le maître est tombé ; les enfants prodiges l'ont entouré. Le jour suivant, les gendarmes ont arrêté le cancre responsable du decontruction mortel du professeur par la foule enthousiaste.
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The name of the dunce was Jacque and this was the master's name also. The dunce had only half a brain, the right half. For this reason he could neither talk nor write, but instead he communicated through drawings.

One day, he became irritated with the tyranny of the left-brained world. His state had never prevented him from symbolic action. He erased all the writings of the teacher as a protest. To replace them, he drew the symbol of the right brain, an uninterpretable scrawl of happiness.

But, without knowing it, this action incited the others to violence. They cried out, "The school is a prison!" The master fell; the prodigal children surrounded him. The following day, the police arrested the dunce responsible for the fatal deconstruction of the teacher by the enthusiastic mob.

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